Wordiness

Teacher edition · Grade 6 · Lesson 22 · Literature · Essay Voyage

Writing Book 6 · sheet 61

Delete a word. If the meaning survives, leave it deleted.

2. Your turn

In your notebook: apply Wordiness to three sentences of your own, double-spaced.

Below is what a full, correct answer looks like. Children's wording will differ and should — mark the thing this lesson taught, not everything at once.

Read out one sentence that uses Wordiness.model — accept any answer that does the same job

3. Before you finish

Read out one sentence that uses Wordiness.

Watch forDo not let cutting become clipping. The test is whether MEANING survives, not whether the sentence got shorter.