Grade 8 · Lesson 31 — Explanatory — Edit and publish

Road-map project · blocked · 30 min · 17 slides · Launch → I do → We do → Read → You do → Closure

Anchor to leave them with: Published means someone else reads it. Finish it to that standard.

Objective Edit and publish of the explanatory project.

Smallest piece Editing is the narrowest pass, and MLA is now on the checklist.

Spot test “Is every source in my text also in my list, and the other way round?”

Why that test works The two-way check is the only part of editing with a completely objective answer, which makes it the right place for a child to feel that editing is checking rather than being judged. It also catches the commonest genuine error — a source cited and never listed — which no amount of reading the prose will find.

Why — in your own words What is offered to others should be complete, not nearly complete.

Practice mode blocked

If it breaks Remedial 104 — one paper, one list, three planted mismatches

Materials Mini-whiteboard + pen per student · Composition notebook · Deck — 17 slides · Writing Book 8, p.70 · Remedial 104 — one paper, one list, three planted mismatches

The lesson, slide by slide

Slide — what is on it	What you SAY	What happens, and why
Slide 1 LAUNCH Writing — Day 31	(nothing yet — this is up as they come in and settle)	Have Writing — Day 31 up before they enter. Say nothing about it. Same slide every lesson, number only changes. It marks the transition into writing before you speak, which saves you having to. Students: See it on the way in. Know writing is next.
Slide 2 LAUNCH Explanatory — Edit and publish	“Everything we have practiced comes together in one piece of writing.”	CONTEXT — say where this lesson sits: what it follows, and what it is part of. One sentence. The children should know what kind of work is starting. Context, not a hook. A child who knows what KIND of lesson this is spends no attention working it out. Students: Listen. Orient.
Slide 3 LAUNCH Today ›› Launch I Do We Do Read You Do Closure	“Here is what we will do today.”	Point to Launch once. Do not explain the others. · Retrieval on MWB · 3-5 min Mini-whiteboards: Retrieval on MWB Students: Look.
Slide 4 LAUNCH Today we work on our own piece of writing.	“Today we work on our own piece of writing.”	PURPOSE — say it slowly, in these words. The teacher objective in the header is for you; this is the version the class hears. Never read a teacher objective to children. The version in the brief header is written for you and is too long and too abstract to say to a class; this one is what they hear. Students: Listen.
No slide LAUNCH WHY — SAY IT ten seconds, off screen, in your own words	“What is offered to others should be complete, not nearly complete.”	Why this matters. Say it, do not read it. Ten seconds, then move on. Your words, not these. This is the one beat of the lesson that should sound like you mean it rather than like it is written down. Students: Listen.
Slide 5 LAUNCH Sixty seconds — what do you remember?	“Before anything new: U16 set 1, U17 set 1.”	Five minutes, boards out. Take answers from boards, not hands. Do not re-teach — this is retrieval, not a lesson. The spiral. These are sets met 2, 5, 10, 20 or 35 lessons ago, and the items are DIFFERENT from the ones taught then — same category, new example. If they cannot recall it, note it and move on. Students: Write answers on boards.
Slide 6 LAUNCH What we will do Editing is the narrowest pass, and MLA is now on the checklist.	“Editing is the narrowest pass, and MLA is now on the checklist.”	Click once per line. Do not elaborate. Students: Listen.
Slide 7 I DO Today Launch ›› I Do We Do Read You Do Closure	“Now we i do.”	Point to I Do once. Do not explain the others. · 3-4 min Mini-whiteboards: NOT here — they watch, they do not write. Writing during I DO is how the model gets missed. Students: Look.
No slide I DO (board — build the VIP, then leave it up)	(you are narrating each stage as you build it)	Build on the BOARD, not the slide. Teacher shows the road map with today's slot named, and models edit and publish on the class piece — one slot only, so the model is followable. Then leave it up for the whole lesson. One click per step. The footsteps are never erased — the same strip is printed at the top of their sheet, so come back to it if anyone stalls. Students: Watch it being built. It stays there to look at.
Slide 8 I DO The test “Is every source in my text also in my list, and the other way round?”	“Here is the question we ask ourselves: “Is every source in my text also in my list, and the other way round?””	Say it, then apply it aloud to the example already on the board. WHY IT WORKS — you will be asked: The two-way check is the only part of editing with a completely objective answer, which makes it the right place for a child to feel that editing is checking rather than being judged. It also catches the commonest genuine error — a source cited and never listed — which no amount of reading the prose will find. Students: Listen, then say the test back.
Slide 9 WE DO Today Launch I Do ›› We Do Read You Do Closure	“Now we we do.”	Point to We Do once. Do not explain the others. · PRIMARY MWB use · 5-6 min Mini-whiteboards: PRIMARY MWB use Students: Look.
Slide 10 WE DO Together	“Now with me.”	Class works the same slot on the shared piece, then reads two versions aloud and says which is clearer and why. Take answers from boards, not from hands — that is how you see all thirty. Students: Answer on boards.
Slide 11 READ Today Launch I Do We Do ›› Read You Do Closure	“Now we read.”	Point to Read once. Do not explain the others. Mini-whiteboards: NOT here — they watch, they do not write. Writing during I DO is how the model gets missed. Students: Look.
Slide 12 READ Writing Book 8, p.70	“Open Writing Book 8 to page 70.”	Read it with them — FASE or teacher read-aloud, never round robin. Stop at the worked example and let them look at it. Our own book, not a purchased one — so it can be printed, edited and improved, and there is no license on it. Students: Follow along. Read when asked.
Slide 13 YOU DO Today Launch I Do We Do Read ›› You Do Closure	“Now we you do.”	Point to You Do once. Do not explain the others. · Written on the sheet · 4-5 min Mini-whiteboards: Written on the sheet Students: Look.
Slide 14 YOU DO In your notebook: edit and publish for your own piece, double-spaced so there is room to correct.	“In your notebook: edit and publish for your own piece, double-spaced so there is room to correct.”	Set them off. Walk the rows. Correct the grip and the setup, not the content, in the first minute. Students: Work in the notebook.
Slide 15 CLOSURE Today Launch I Do We Do Read You Do ›› Closure	“Now we closure.”	Point to Closure once. Do not explain the others. · Display answers on MWB · 2-3 min Mini-whiteboards: Display answers on MWB Students: Look.
Slide 16 CLOSURE Read the one sentence you are most sure of.	“Read the one sentence you are most sure of.”	Exit Direction. Take it from every child before anyone stands. It belongs to today's content — it is how you know who has it. Students: Answer, then pack away.
Slide 17 CLOSURE Published means someone else reads it. Finish it to that standard.	“Published means someone else reads it. Finish it to that standard.”	Say it once. Leave it on screen as they pack away. The anchor — the one line you want them to still have tomorrow. Students: Hear it. Repeat it if asked.

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